The table below shows the total population and the proportion of males and females aged 15 and aged 75 in the UK from 1911 to 2011.

Total population and proportion of males and females aged 15 and 75 in the UK - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 6 · 158 words.

The table gives information about the total population and the proportion of males and females aged 15 and 75 in the UK between 1911 and 2011.

Overall, the total population of the UK increased over the given period. The percentage of people aged 15 decreased, while the proportion of people aged 75 increased considerably.

In 1911, the total population was 36.1 million. It grew to 46.1 million in 1961 and reached 56.1 million in 2011. For the 15-year-old group, the percentage was 1.86% in 1911, but it fell to 1.48% in 1961 and 1.23% in 2011. The number of males aged 15 was 334,200 in 1911 and increased slightly to 354,400 in 2011. However, the number of females decreased slightly, from 335,700 to 333,700.

For the 75-year-old group, the percentage was only 0.23% in 1911, but it increased significantly to 0.70% in 2011. In 1911, there were 34,100 males and 47,400 females aged 75. These figures rose considerab

Examiner feedback

The response successfully identifies key trends and provides a clear overview of the table data regarding the UK population. However, the essay is incomplete at the end, which restricts the depth of task fulfillment and impacts the overall score.

Task Achievement - 6

- The response covers the main requirements of the task, presenting an overview and selecting key data from the table. - Key features such as total population growth and shifts in age groups are identified, though the incomplete conclusion restricts full coverage. - Data is accurately cited from the table to support descriptions, despite the abrupt ending.

Coherence & Cohesion - 6

- Paragraph organization is logical with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. - Cohesive devices are used adequately, though transitions between some details feel slightly mechanical. - Overall progression is clear, moving from total population trends to specific age groups.

Lexical Resource - 6

- The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'proportion' and 'considerably'. - Word choice lacks a wide range of synonyms, leading to some repetition of standard data-describing verbs. - Spelling and word formation are accurate where the text is completed.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 6

- A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is utilized, though flexibility is somewhat limited. - Grammatical accuracy is generally maintained in simple sentences, with minor issues in more complex formulations. - Punctuation is appropriately managed, though the text cuts off incomplete at the end.

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