The graph below shows the total births and the deaths in a European country from 1950 to 2050.

Total births and deaths in European country from 1950 to 2050 - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 7 · 167 words.

The line graph compares the number of births and deaths in a European country between 1950 and 2050.

Overall, the number of births was higher than the number of deaths at the beginning of the period and in the future the number of deaths is predicted to rise and may exceed the number of births.

Regarding the number of births, the figure experienced a rise from about 780000 to 1000000 births between 1950 and 1970. In addition, it declined from 1000000 to 600000 between 1970 and 1990. Meanwhile, the figure rose from 600000 to about 700000 between 1990 and 2010 and it is predicted to remain stable at 700000 between 2010 and 2050.

Regarding the number of deaths, the figure climbed from about 700000 to approximately 730000 between 1950 and 1970. In addition, the number of deaths declined gradually from around 730000 in 1970 to around 680000 in 2030. Meanwhile, the number of deaths is predicted to rise from about 680000 to 800000 between 2030 and 2050.

Examiner feedback

The response effectively covers all requirements of Task 1 with a clear overview and accurate data selection. Grammar and vocabulary are well controlled at a Band 7 level, though greater lexical variety would elevate the essay further.

Task Achievement - 7

- All parts of the task are appropriately covered, comparing births and deaths across the full timeline. - A clear overview is presented in the second paragraph, capturing the main trends and future intersection. - Key features and specific data points are selected and supported with accurate figures.

Coherence & Cohesion - 7

- Information is logically organised with clear paragraphing separating the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. - Cohesive devices are used adequately, though phrases like 'Regarding the number of' are slightly repetitive. - Overall progression is clear and easy to follow from historical data to future projections.

Lexical Resource - 7

- Vocabulary is sufficient to describe data flexibly, utilizing terms like 'experienced a rise', 'declined', 'remain stable', and 'climbed'. - Collocations are appropriate, though some lexical choices repeat ('the figure', 'the number of births/deaths'). - Spelling and word formation are accurate throughout.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 7

- A good mix of simple and complex sentence structures is used to describe trends and future predictions. - Grammar and punctuation are generally well controlled with frequent error-free sentences. - Minor punctuation omissions, such as commas after introductory time phrases, are present but do not impede communication.

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