The graphs show the way in which men and women used the Internet in a country in 2007 and 2009.

Percentage Men Women Using Internet Different Purposes 2007 2009 - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 7.5 · 234 words.

The given bar chart depicts the proportion of males and females using the Internet for many different purposes -- emailing, shopping online, getting news, banking, using social media, and conducting research -- in a particular country in the years, 2007 and 2009.

Overall, the proportion of female users of the Internet was higher in four out of six categories, namely email, online shopping, banking, and social media, while males had a higher preference for reading news. Meanwhile, the proportion of males and females showed similar level of engagement for research. Notably, email was the most popular among both genders, whereas social media and research had the lowest figures for males and females respectively.

With respect to most preferred options, email stood out as the most prominent, 70% for females and approximately 65% for males. Similarly, females dominated in banking with 50%, compared to males, comprising roughly 45%. Conversely, males showed higher engagement in news, amounting to around 55%, closely followed by females with 50%.

Regarding less preferred categories, females were more likely engage in online shopping than males, accounting for nearly 45% of the former and 40% for the latter. The ranking of genders in social media followed a similar pattern, representing the dominance of females with approximately 35%, which was marginally higher than the proportion of males (25%). In contrast, the proportions of males and females recorded in research each accounted for 30%.

Examiner feedback

The response is well-written with a clear structure and sophisticated vocabulary. However, it significantly overlooks the time dimension (2007 vs 2009) mentioned in the prompt, treating the data as a static comparison of genders only, which limits the Task Achievement score.

Task Achievement - 7

- The response covers all requirements of the task and presents a clear overview. - Key features are highlighted; however, the response fails to address the temporal aspect (the comparison between 2007 and 2009). - Data is appropriately categorized and main differences between genders are identified.

Coherence & Cohesion - 8

- Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately with logical sequencing. - Information and ideas are organized into clear categories (high vs. low preference). - Cohesion is well managed through the use of linking words like 'Conversely', 'Similarly', and 'Regarding'.

Lexical Resource - 8

- A wide range of vocabulary is used fluently to convey precise meanings (e.g., 'prominent', 'dominated', 'marginally'). - Skillful use of uncommon lexical items like 'engagement' and 'former/latter'. - Spelling and word formation are accurate with minimal errors.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 7

- A variety of complex structures is used with good flexibility and accuracy. - Frequent error-free sentences are present throughout the response. - Minor grammatical slips occur, such as 'more likely engage' missing the particle 'to'.

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