The charts below show the reasons for immigrants to and from a European country in 2009.

Immigrants Reasons Leaving Entering European Country 2009 Chart - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 7.5 · 178 words.

The two pie charts compare the proportions of reasons why people immigrated to and from a European country in 2009.

Overall, employment-related factors were one of the main reasons for migration in both directions. However, moving to the country was more commonly associated with family reasons, while leaving the country was mainly driven by having a definite job elsewhere. Conversely, "no reason" bracket recorded the lowest percentages.

Looking first at immigration rate to the European country, the largest share was people accompanying family members, which accounted for 25%. This was closely followed by employment causes at 23%. Meanwhile, three categories - study, looking for work and other reasons, represented 15% of total immigrants. In contrast, only a minority of people moved without any specific trigger, 7%.

Regarding emigration, the primary motivation was securing a definite job for 38% of leavers. The second most common factor was other reasons. Meanwhile, accompanying family members accounted for 15%, and looking for work representd 13%. A smaller proportion of people left for study (7%), whereas only 4% reported having no particular reason.

Examiner feedback

This is a strong Task 1 response that clearly identifies the main trends and provides an accurate comparison of the data. The overview is particularly well-written, and the logical organization makes it easy for the reader to follow. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on eliminating minor spelling slips and incorporating more varied comparative structures (e.g., using 'double', 'triple', or 'twofold').

Task Achievement - 8

- The response covers all the requirements of the task appropriately and sufficiently. - Key features (immigration vs. emigration) are skillfully selected and clearly highlighted. - A very clear and effective overview is provided in the second paragraph, summarizing the main trends without getting bogged down in detail. - The data is accurately reported based on the provided charts, and there is a good attempt at grouping similar data points (e.g., the 15% group).

Coherence & Cohesion - 8

- The information is logically organized with a clear progression from the introduction/overview to specific data points. - Cohesive devices (e.g., 'Conversely', 'Regarding', 'Meanwhile', 'In contrast') are used naturally and effectively to link ideas. - Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different aspects of the data (immigration vs. emigration). - Referencing is clear, though a bit more variety in substitution could push this to a 9.

Lexical Resource - 7

- A good range of vocabulary is used, including sophisticated terms like 'primary motivation', 'specific trigger', and 'employment-related factors'.- - There is one clear spelling error ('representd') and minor awkwardness in 'employment causes' (rather than 'reasons' or 'purposes'). - Style and collocation are generally strong, though slightly less flexible than a Band 8 or 9 response.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 8

- The writer uses a wide range of structures, including complex sentences and relative clauses ('which accounted for...'). - The majority of sentences are error-free. - Punctuation is well-managed throughout the response. - Minor slips like 'the immigration rate' (missing 'the' in one instance) do not impede communication.

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